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Dangerous thoughts: DA drabble

Dangerous thoughts.

When he started out, he wasn't actually thinking of escape. Not really. That's the type of thinking that lead to a stint in Psy-ops, or worse: in the bins ready to provide organs for wounded soldiers.

No, 494 was simply checking the borders and defenses of dear old Manticore.

If he happened to test a few personally, well, he was simply looking out for the best interest of him and his kind.

Then, while he was simply checking the extent of the holes in their perimeter, and happened to keep running, well outside of the accepted borders, he was simply getting some much needed exercise after his time in lock-up (a guy could get stiff during so long in one little cell).

He wasn't a traitor, like one of the '09ers.

At least that's what he told the search and retrieval team that found him 15 clicks SE of the new base.

He continued to repeat it, long after his voice had gone hoarse from screaming, during the mandatory "therapy" session afterwards.

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greenveg
Nov. 17th, 2007 02:10 am (UTC)
Okay, is it wrong that the end made me L-O-L? ;)

This was quite good. And I'm not just saying that! Alec felt vaguely John Sheppardesque I think. Possibly I'm projecting though since the last fic I read was SGA (John had amnesia).

One thing that totally stood out for me was the organ bin punishment. That felt fresh and not overused.

My only qualm is that perhaps "therapy" at the end should be replaced with something else. "Treatment" or "examination" perhaps? I do not know.

Congratulations, my lovely! XOXO
greenveg
Nov. 17th, 2007 02:12 am (UTC)
Also, I like the beginning!


Now write me Rome fic? :D
ash_is_veg
Nov. 17th, 2007 03:07 am (UTC)
Okay, is it wrong that the end made me L-O-L? ;)

Of course not. *Goes to check ending* Um, maybe a little?
It wasn't really what I was originally thinking when I started writing it.

This was quite good. And I'm not just saying that! Alec felt vaguely John Sheppardesque I think.

I'm so flattered! *hearts you and Sheppard both*

One thing that totally stood out for me was the organ bin punishment. That felt fresh and not overused.

Yeah, I figured it wasn't completely out of the realm of possibility.

I shall work on the therapy word choice before I X-post it.

Thank you, my dear!

You are the bestest twin ever!

Cookies for you!

greenveg
Nov. 17th, 2007 03:37 am (UTC)
Cookies for you!

Do you MEAN IT? *Holds hands tight*

These look interesting!
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